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I feel it hook and snag into me,
Seducing or beating me into submission.
A delicious poison.
A thorny rose.

I feel the tide of it rise up,
Slowly growing and gathering strength.
A burning cloud.
A choking noose.

I feel it carry me into the depths,
Sweeping my resistance away.
A whipping gale.
A crashing wave.

I feel my eyes open once it's done,
Knowing that it'll happen again soon.
A chosen dependency.
A hurtful addiction.
First attempt at a contest in a group. I rather like this poem. Well... Hopefully it at least isn't a disgrace to the other poems in the competition.
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SirenaClaws Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It makes me think that you smoke pot or something! I know better though. Also, not all poems have to rhyme, I can't think of anything that rhymes with a certain word, so I wing it :heart:
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Kthejaybee3 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god. I LOVE this. It's beautiful.
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iRainCrows Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Thanks~ :)
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Peaceful-Image Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Awesome :D
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iRainCrows Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Thank you!
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InkStainedPens Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
third stanza second line 'me' to 'my' :) I hope you win:)
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iRainCrows Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
I highly doubt it :P
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InkStainedPens Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
pshhh
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iRainCrows Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
The main problem I have with it is to me it seems to be lacking a bit of emotion or grip to it... Idk, I just don't feel it captures the reader as well as some of my other poems...
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InkStainedPens Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You can always just lay it down for a while and then revise it later
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